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dirk van Nouhguys's avatar

Somehow this didn't work for me. It's the guy. He didn't gel for me .I can't quite believe in him and therefore not in his suffering. Maybe if you established that he was (or fancied himself) a tough guy in the first sentence so that there would be a constant tension between the toughness he is trying to project and the victimhood we associate with saucer stories.

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Betty Kano's avatar

Bravo! A miles long sentence there and back.

Thanks!!!!

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